[critique] New Song: "Becky's Song"

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A friend of mine, Danny Della Paolera, shared with me an un-lyric'd tune he 
wrote that he titled "Beck's Song".  Input, reaction and critique is welcome 
and requested.

Lyrics : Becky's Song
Tune of: DDP's "Becky's Song"
MP3 at : http://members.home.net/kvanhout/beckysong.mp3
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With a puff your playfulness
Dances a white dandelion in the sun
Floating high with happiness
Drifting down softly to earth, life begun

Singing songs with summer storms
Keeping the time with the drops on the pane
Cup of cocoa, keeping warm
I thank The Lord for my Becky again

Now and then to a man; blessings from above
Miracle sent to me, Becky, my love

Better than I was before
You're making me to be more than I am
Standing with me, looking t'ward
Linking our lives as a woman and man

Now and then to a man; blessings from above
Thank you Lord, once again. Becky, my love

Dandelions and summer storms
Laughing in sunshine and singing with rain
In my arms, forever more
We share our love, share our lives 
As a husband and wife
Thank you Lord for my Becky, again
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  Music DDP (c) 1999
  Lyrics Qe'van (c) 2001_________________________________

Qe'van the Unclothed, Bard of Nor 
http://members.home.net/qevan

... 'And you want to do =what= with Danny???'- Amy to Tom