[critique] Filk: A Fish Out of Water

["Daniel R. Reitman" <dr1020442@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>]

This one is based on a comic strip called Safe Havens.  I'm not sure 
how many of you get it in your local papers, but I understand it is 
online.

This was a two-con writing project.  I wrote two thirds of it late 
one night at GaFilk and finished it while listening to Jeff and Maya 
perform at NorWesCon last Friday.  I suspect they noticed me 
scribbling away, but it wasn't about them.  :-)

								Dan, ad nauseam

A Fish Out of Water

Music and Lyrics: Daniel Reitman
c 2001 Daniel Reitman

A new girl came to school that year
To everyone's surprise
And some would say that they could see
The ocean in her eyes
By day she looked like all the rest
With legs in pace of tail
But she slept in the aquarium
From nose to fin in scales

She fell in with the brainy clique
The ones who would be fen
In autumn all their hormones struck
And pairing did begin
His feet were never on the ground
Hair waving in the breeze
He caught her eye from upside down
A swinging on trapeze

And as they passed along the halls
They made so many stare
Few would have matched a swimmer with
A child of the air
He saved her from a frozen pond
It wasn't quite a ploy
But the mermaid in the middle school
She loved the trapeze boy