[critique] Re: RFC: The Smile in Your Eyes

[Sean Cleary <SCleary@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>]

I once heard of a form of song where the events are not detailed because
they are common to everyone, that everyone understands what is
happening, and the song is about the events (at a once removed distance,
like how they felt) without explaining what is common knowledge. Like
some black spirituals singing about the bible without detailing it. This
knowledge has been perilous. Every time I tried to do such a song, I got
jumped on because I did not detail the events well enough for most to
figure out what I was talking about. 
No doubt that this is like the saying "accelerate into a turn to keep
traction". Took me years to find when to use this, and the many ways not
to use this. I had given up, and found its use by accident (for once no
collision, no hurt, for once pun not intended - some know my driving
record and need the reassurance).
	Sean

	-----Original Message-----
	From:	Dave Weingart [SMTP:phydeaux@liii.com]
	Sent:	Wednesday, April 11, 2001 20:22
	To:	critique@filknet.org
	Subject:	[critique] RFC:  The Smile in Your Eyes

	This worked itself out of my head today, still undergoing a few
changes
	here and there.  I know which parts I think need work, but I'd
like to hear
	what other people say.

	*****

	THE SMILE IN YOUR EYES

	Words & Music © 2001 David Weingart

	Once lover, now a friend at heart
	You've given me a second start
	     I can't regret it, and I won't apologize
	     And I will not forget it, the smile in your eyes

	What is it here that makes you scared?
	You wonder why it is I care
	     Don't ever doubt it while the sun is in the sky
	     I can read all about it in the smile in your eyes

	        I don't stop to wonder what connects us, you and me
	        No more than the thunder can distract the rolling sea
	        Still there's something special which I can't and don't
deny
	        I feel it in the laughter and the smile in your eyes

	You stand there silent and amazed
	And understand me when I say
	    That a friend who will hold you is a gem beyond all price
	    For the things they have told you and the smile in their
eyes

	--
	73 de Dave Weingart  KA2ESK     "They reached for tomorrow, but
tomorrow's
	mailto:phydeaux@liii.com         more of the same.  They reached
for
	http://www.liii.com/~phydeaux    tomorrow, but tomorrow never
came."
	ICQ 57055207                             -- Berlin, "Masquerade"