[critique] RFC: The Smile in Your Eyes

[Dave Weingart <phydeaux@xxxxxxxx>]

This worked itself out of my head today, still undergoing a few changes
here and there.  I know which parts I think need work, but I'd like to hear
what other people say.

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THE SMILE IN YOUR EYES

Words & Music © 2001 David Weingart

Once lover, now a friend at heart
You've given me a second start
     I can't regret it, and I won't apologize
     And I will not forget it, the smile in your eyes

What is it here that makes you scared?
You wonder why it is I care
     Don't ever doubt it while the sun is in the sky
     I can read all about it in the smile in your eyes

        I don't stop to wonder what connects us, you and me
        No more than the thunder can distract the rolling sea
        Still there's something special which I can't and don't deny
        I feel it in the laughter and the smile in your eyes

You stand there silent and amazed
And understand me when I say
    That a friend who will hold you is a gem beyond all price
    For the things they have told you and the smile in their eyes

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