[critique] Re: New Song: Searching for a title

[Gwenzilla <wireharp@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>]

Dave said...
> Might you want to rhyme "abode" instead, something like "dreams in the
> bricks of that magic abode" 

Well-- I really wanted to give a nod to what that kind of building stands for, for me. And that would be history, the chivalric code, that kind of thing. I don't know that the word 'magic' really conveys what I was thinking of. The main thing I'm wanting to do here is pare down the syllables so I can use 'reverence' or 'veneration' along with something that will get across the knightly code of honor. Maybe I'm asking for too much in this one line.

-g