[critique] Re: New Song: Searching for a title

[phydeaux@xxxxxxxx]

Once upon a time, Gwenzilla said:
> Reverence in red brick for that ethical code,*

Might you want to rhyme "abode" instead, something like "dreams in the
bricks of that magic abode" 

> Does anyone have title ideas? The line with the * has given me no end of trouble, as well.

Maison des reves perdus (or, if you want to stick to English, that translates
to "House of Lost Dreams").

There should be a circumflex over the first 'e' in reves, but I don't have
that capability telnetting in from work.


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