[critique] New Song: Kill Da Bugs!

["Qe'van" <qevan@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>]

Not exactly new by me...but looking for input..

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"Kill Da Bugs!"
(tto: Wake Me Up)

Kill da bugs!
Kill da bugs!
Kill da bugs!
Kill da bugs!

It puts da "boom-boom" into my heart!
It makes my soul fly highter when da killin' starts!
Kill da bugs, scattering brains!
I go 'bang-bang-bang' while my buds do the same!

My eyes ain't lyin'
Something ain't right
My best friends dyin' 
Faster than last night
Switch that lever 
Beside my head
Shoot'em faster, buddy
I'll fry'em now with fire instead!

Fire'em up! And now they glow-glow!
Don't let 'em get away while they glow so.
Shoot'em up, now while they glow-glow.
You can't really miss'em when they're burnin' bright.
Fire'em up! And now they glow-glow!
We got some buggy-killin' kind of mojo
Fire'em up! Now, while they glow-glow, guys
Make'em dance in the sky.
I wanna hear that high, 
Death scream.

Come'on get back guys, out of my way.
I'll make the bugs shine brighter than the sun today!
I touch the next one down with a flame
Our kills-per-minute never been the same!
Come on buggies, I'm your bane.
Ya think I'm crazy, you think I'm insane?
Come on buddies, shoot on sight
Bugs are dyin. Everything is going right!

Fire'em up! And now they glow-glow!
Don't let 'em get away while they glow so.
Shoot'em up, now while they glow-glow.
You can't really miss'em when they're burnin' bright.
Fire'em up! And now they glow-glow!
We got some buggy-killin' kind of mojo.
Fire'em up! And while they glow-glow, guys
Make'em dance in the sky.
I wanna hear that high, 
Dy-ing scream!

Kill da bugs!
Kill da bugs!

Double-time buddies, move in tight.
We be killin' some bugs tonight!
Cold before, but now it's warm instead.
Kill the bugs! Then make sure they're dead!

Kill da bugs!

Fire'em up! And now they glow-glow!
Don't let 'em get away while they glow so.
Shoot'em up, now while they glow-glow.
You can't really miss'em when they're burnin' bright.
Fire'em up! And now they glow-glow!
We got some buggy-killin' kind of mojo.
Fire'em up! And while they glow-glow, guys
Make'em dance in the sky.

(continue to fade...)


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-   Qe'van the Unclothed - tlhIngan bard and Volehunter
    "Fulfilling fantasies since March, 2000"
    Real Life is a crutch for those who cannot handle Star Trek
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'Aaaaaaauuuuuuugggggghhhhhh!!!!!!' <runs screaming in terror>  Brad