[critique] Re: Revised Song: In My Books

[Sean Cleary <SCleary@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>]

I know that this is poor critism, but I like it. Emotionally it knows
where it is going (like Lee's song) and gets there.
The chorus to Drink up the River and Suicide express differ by only one
word. Does that make them too derivative?
Sean

	-----Original Message-----
	From:	the Ginger Cat [SMTP:gingi@world.std.com]
	Sent:	Tuesday, February 13, 2001 12:34
	To:	critique@filknet.org
	Subject:	[critique] Revised Song: In My Books

	In My Books
	(originally written last year sometime, revised today)
	Based on "In My Life" by John Lennon & Paul McCartney

	There are places I'll remember
	All my life though some have changed.
	Some will stay that way forever
	Some will grow, and some will change.
	All these places have their moments
	With wonders and friends I still can recall,
	Some are real and some are fiction
	In my books, I've seen them all.

	I have tessered with the witches,
	I have been afraid of Aslan too,
	I've followed Laura 'cross the prairies,
	But I'm always up for something new.
	And I know I'll never lose affection
	For people in books I've read before
	I know I'll often stop to read about them
	In my books, I'll join them more.

	And I know I'll never lose affection
	For people in books I've read before
	I know I'll often stop to read about them
	In my books, I'll join them more.
	In my books, I'll join them more.


	-=-=-=-
	Some background:  Last year, I wrote this.  Feeling somewhat
puffed up
	over the fact that Lee had published 2 of my songs, in quick
succession,
	in Xeno, I sent it directly to her rather than to rmf.  She
pointed out
	that as it wasn't a parody, it borrowed too heavily from the
original for
	her to be comfortable with publishing it.  She was right, and
I've been
	meaning to get back to it... and this list gave me an excuse.
<grin>

	I still haven't changed the first two lines to make more
distance from the
	original because, well... that was the inspiration, and it's
meant as a
	tribute.  The original is at
http://www.gingicat.org/inmybooks.html if you
	want to compare.

	-- 
	R. S. Silverman
	http://www.gingicat.org
	"It isn't my fault that I'm supposed to be living in a musical
and got
	stuck in a dramatic production." --Robert Cooke, on
rec.music.filk