[critique] Revised Song: In My Books

[the Ginger Cat <gingi@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>]

In My Books
(originally written last year sometime, revised today)
Based on "In My Life" by John Lennon & Paul McCartney

There are places I'll remember
All my life though some have changed.
Some will stay that way forever
Some will grow, and some will change.
All these places have their moments
With wonders and friends I still can recall,
Some are real and some are fiction
In my books, I've seen them all.

I have tessered with the witches,
I have been afraid of Aslan too,
I've followed Laura 'cross the prairies,
But I'm always up for something new.
And I know I'll never lose affection
For people in books I've read before
I know I'll often stop to read about them
In my books, I'll join them more.

And I know I'll never lose affection
For people in books I've read before
I know I'll often stop to read about them
In my books, I'll join them more.
In my books, I'll join them more.


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Some background:  Last year, I wrote this.  Feeling somewhat puffed up
over the fact that Lee had published 2 of my songs, in quick succession,
in Xeno, I sent it directly to her rather than to rmf.  She pointed out
that as it wasn't a parody, it borrowed too heavily from the original for
her to be comfortable with publishing it.  She was right, and I've been
meaning to get back to it... and this list gave me an excuse.  <grin>

I still haven't changed the first two lines to make more distance from the
original because, well... that was the inspiration, and it's meant as a
tribute.  The original is at http://www.gingicat.org/inmybooks.html if you
want to compare.

-- 
R. S. Silverman
http://www.gingicat.org
"It isn't my fault that I'm supposed to be living in a musical and got
stuck in a dramatic production." --Robert Cooke, on rec.music.filk